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LR - 13 TB 3

Unread post by Nimrod » 03 Oct 2006, 10:54

MOLITVA

Dragi Bo??e, ne bojim se, mada je minut do dva. Tvrde nam da će taj meteor u dva sata uni??titi planet. Ne bojim se, jer znam da svijet ne mo??e skonćati samo tako, bez ikakvog smisla. Tvoj plan je druga[?]?iji. Meteor je samo test vjere. Nestat će u zadnjem trenutku, zar ne? Ti si to samo danas odlu[?]?io da se svima, [?]?ak i nevjernicima uka??e?? u svoj svojoj moći i dobroti. U dva i jednu minutu, svi, [?]?ak i nevjernici, će slaviti Tebe, Gospode.
Nebo se zamra[?]?ilo... ali evo, ne bojim se! Evo, otkucava dva. Ni??ta se nije dogo
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Unread post by Bahod » 04 Oct 2006, 16:11

I will skip this one.
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Unread post by Alien2dio » 04 Oct 2006, 18:05

Bahod wrote:I will skip this one.
I pisac je trebao!
Ako nista bar su recenice malo popeglanije nego u UVID-u
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Mr. Burns: Oooh, so Mother Nature needs a favor?! Well maybe she should have thought of that when she was besetting us with droughts and floods and poison monkeys! Nature started the fight for survival, and now she wants to quit because she's losing. Well I say, hard cheese

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Unread post by Izitpajn » 04 Oct 2006, 18:06

Mo??da malo predvidljivo, ali sam se nasmije??io na kraju ;)

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Unread post by klaun van trenda » 04 Oct 2006, 20:57

nije mi "vjerodostojana" prič?a, iako ima "ne??to" u ideji!
sve ovo dajem generaciji u dešperaciji!
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Unread post by Indigo Montoya » 04 Oct 2006, 22:24

Kratka varijacija na jednu prilič?no peglanu temu sudnjeg dana...

Kratko, jasno sa korektnim "panč?em" na kraju no kao ??to rekoh peglali su to mnogi i du??e a bogami i kraće...

Moje mi??ljenje za radijonu OK!


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Unread post by mcn » 09 Oct 2006, 12:02

Dobro iako predvidljivo - kanda je jasno da će zavrssiti na pola rijecci i prije no poccne. Logika razmissljanja lika dobra, reccenice neupeglane. Mozzda je na radionicu moglo biti poslano manje pricca kako bi prosjeccna ocjena bila vissa? >:)

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PS Napravit chu pauzu sa ccitanjem TB-a sada jerbo imam slajt overloud.

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